Week 7 Storytelling: A Lonely Night
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There once was a girl named Jess. She was later married at a young age of 16 to John. These two were inseparable. John adored Jess more than anyone else in the world. Although they came from religious families, they, themselves, were not. After moving in with each other the trouble began...
Jess: Let's have a baby.
John: I think that we should
After a year passed, this conversation turned into a reality. Their child was beautiful. They originally planned not to raise this child in faith of any kind. But, one day one of John's friends became a large influence in his life. Mark was involved with the Catholic church his entire life. After talking with Mark about religion, John started to develop his faith even more.
John: Let's go to church.
Jess: What!? This doesn't seem like you.
Jess did not know how to react. As years passed, Jess and John began to grow apart. They did not expect this situation on their wedding day. One Sunday morning, John told Jess that he would devote his life to God. With that, he would no longer sleep in the same room as Jess or be physically involved with her. Jess could not handle not having attention from her husband anymore.
3 years later...
Jess was fed up with life. She grew lonelier and lonelier. She eventually turned to a God to help her because she was so lonely. He told her that she will have 5 husbands in her next life. This was so shocking for her. After having 5 husbands she will be seen basically as a "women of the night."
Jess could not change this fate. Rather she learned to live with this love or she could change it on her own by finding a new path of life.
Source. The version of the story below is based on Notes of a Study of the Preliminary Chapters of the Mahabharata by V. Venkatachellam Iyer (1922).
Authors Note:
I wrote this story because I thought that this story is a perfect example of living the extremes. This couple originally starts with the same values, but they end up growing apart. It is interesting to see how this was a problem during the time that this epic was written. But, this story goes a step further because the woman is basically punished for wanting to have intercourse. This is a topic that is a taboo in many different cultures and religions.
This story is awesome! This is one of the most in depth stories that i have read in this class so far. You really were able to get my attention with the different dialogue and details within the story. It was a really creative idea to have religion be the separation of their marriage. I would have never thought of that being a cause for that, let alone incorporate it into my own story. Can't wait to read more of your stories!!
ReplyDeleteHello Kelsea. Your story is unexpected. You did pick a spectacular title. It is settle, yet descriptive. I am unsure of the dialog. It feels like there should be a lot more or none at all. Also, minor detail “John: I think that we should” needs a period. I did like the meaning of your story. Religion is a complicated matter, especially when your family surrounds you with it. Overall it was a fine story, and I look forward to your future writings.
ReplyDeleteHi again! This story is really good. I like how you included the extremes (or going from not religious to religious). This would be definitely be tricky in a relationship, but I believe the partener usually tends to follow in the path of the other, but not always. I love how you ventured with this bold approach. Great story and I look forward to reading more!
ReplyDeleteHello Kelsea!
ReplyDeleteI never expected I would read a story like this and it was really good. Two person nothing to do with god but at some point they started ask god for help. They both were married but it does not mean that your marriage will never face hardship. I believe that if you follow each other and support each other than that will lead to have a successful marriage.